Hi, Noriko. It's a fine story, but if you don't mind some constructive criticism, try writing where you "tell us" less of the story and more of "showing" what the characters are experiencing.

You have over a dozen paragraphs beginning with, "Joseph" he did this, was that, saw this, went there. And Daphne starts many other paragraphs.

It's more engrossing to the reader to see what the characters are doing and why, rather than being told what they did, or liked, or were good at. etc.

I hope my feedback is okay.