Arpad Nagy
Nov 27, 2021

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There are a lot of great points in here, for relationships that are old and new. It's a good revisiting. I would like to add though, I think you would be more effective by thinning your article. In several places you sort of beat the message to death-sorry to be harsh, I mean it well. If you edit down repetitive statements, you could drop your read time from 14 to probably under 10. Just my opinion. I did appreciate many points made though.

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Arpad Nagy
Arpad Nagy

Written by Arpad Nagy

Shortlisted for 2024 Northwind Writing Award in NF/Fiction. New owner of First Line Fiction. Editor @ The Memoirist, AoE, Book Cafe, Short Place, Kitchen Tales.

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